ashjones,elise06,summerbum
ashjones 05 Mar 2010 00:40
-catching intro(1st paragraph), brings out ethos
-2nd to last sentence does not seem 100% accurate.
-is this speaking to all transgenders? Is this how they feel or is it definite?
-thesis is clear and strong, however the paragraph it is in seems un-needed in your paper.
-maybe consider taking a few sentences from your last paragraph to add to the previous ones.
-the paper seems like it will address: social norms, and examples of people who do not fit these societal norms.