Comments on intro
meags34 05 Mar 2010 00:28
1) Effective at grabbing reader's attention. It gives a relatable example for people who have experiences with sports.
2) Good examples provided using the gender binary. Comparing the two examples helps illustrate how much someone would be affected by falling outside of the gender binary.
3) Clearly stated which stories will be used to illustrate points. The thesis seems a little long/choppy. Maybe make it into two sentences?